These essays were pretty good, and I definitely got the impression that you are all reading each others work. I think this is great, and makes the class that much more helpful. However, some of these essays seemed too similar.
You all did a sufficient job of analyzing Price's approach, but some of you missed out on her tone to some extent. Like Douglass, she gets pretty sarcastic and even bitter, and she clearly identifies the pink plastic flamingo as a sad symbol of American kitsch. This idea could, and arguably should, serve as the umbrella concept expanding over everything - be it her bold language or references to other cultures.
If you Google "Jennifer Price Flamingos" you will most likely, and very quickly, encounter other essays written for the same purposes. Here's an essay by Chris Chen, some guy who goes to U of C. Probably the same prompt. And here's the AP website which has the scoring criteria (which I'm not supposed to show you guys according to some teachers - but if it helps your scores I think you should see it).
Read the student essays and read the official AP feedback at the end describing what the students did and didn't do to earn their scores. The important thing is this essay is to have a clear idea of Price's view (that she doesn't like what the flamingo represents) and show where and how she strengthens this view. The better scoring essays identified her distaste. Some of your essays skirted this and I didn't really dock points for it. Most of your essays would get 4 or 5 on this.
Plato | 9.3/10 |
Locke | 9.3/10 |
Socrates | 8.0/10 |
Descartes | 9.2/10 |
Hobbes | 9.2/10 |
Aristotle | 9.3/10 |
Aquinas | 9.2/10 |
Nietzsche | 9.4/10 |
Marx | 9.5/10 |
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